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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2004 4:22 am Post subject: "Farewell for a Friend" |
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This one's been mentioned elsewhere as my contribution to "Variations on a Theme" on The Foxx Den. It's currently on page 10 and proceding nicely. I've been working interactive edit/proof work with Mike so that it'll be ready to send out for final review not too long after I finish it. I'd also like to thank Mike for some wonferful bits of inspiration that make it a better work.
It's not as intense as some of the other stories; nor is it totally serious, there are touches of humor amidst the sadness as in real life. There are a few other touches too, but I want those to be a surprise to readers. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Mapper Registered User
Joined: 21 Jun 2003 Posts: 892 Location: East coast somewhere
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Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2004 9:56 am Post subject: |
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excellent _________________
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mwalimu Registered User
Joined: 08 Nov 2002 Posts: 782 Location: Normal, IL
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Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2004 11:45 am Post subject: |
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I'm probably your biggest holdup. I'll try to give what you sent me a look over and get you some feedback this weekend. _________________ mwalimu
My webpage -*-*- My LiveJournal
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Sat Jun 19, 2004 12:58 am Post subject: |
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mwalimu wrote: | I'm probably your biggest holdup. I'll try to give what you sent me a look over and get you some feedback this weekend. |
Actually, if you look at my latest draft, I think I've pretty well worked around that. *grins* Marvelous what you can do when inspired by circumstances. This also leaves you maximum manuevering room for your story to interact with mine.
*G* BTW, I had to sit in a waiting room for a routine visit to the doc by Paula and got another page done. It's shaping up nicely indeed. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2004 12:34 am Post subject: |
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Well, nearly finished, working the last sequence now, then a coordination copy to Mwalimu and an edit/proof copy to my editor and it'll be ready for review by the "Variations" writers group before the final cleaned up version goes to Chris. It looks like it's going to come in at 12-13 pages and cover a fair bit of territory. Those I've had reading working drafts for feedback seem to like it a lot. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Concolor Registered User
Joined: 19 Nov 2001 Posts: 832 Location: South Carolina
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2004 3:41 pm Post subject: |
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Be Envious.
Be Very Envious.
I was privileged to be one of his proofreaders. No spoilers here, but mucho kudos for tying a number of ends together so they turn out nice and neat. You'll all like this one. _________________ Oddly enough, my life is based on a true story. (Ashleigh Brilliant) |
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Styx Site Owner
Joined: 25 Dec 2002 Posts: 3176 Location: West Covina, California
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2004 7:01 pm Post subject: |
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I hope it's not as emotionally loaded as Tabitha Ch: 6 to be honest I still haven't read the other tab ch6 stories. Not because I don't think there're well written quite the opposite, given how well the authors have done with their other stories I'm worried that they will have the same effect that ch6 did on me. Chapter 6 didn't just make me sad you understand....it destroyed me I was so depressed I couldn't read the rest for a week. This disturbed me, I have read the other stories and have watched movies that were....moving I guess best describes the feeling but JEEZ the loss I felt after ch6 had me wondering if I could take the others and I haven't been able to get up the nerve to read them. _________________ "Political Correctness is tyranny with manners." Charlton Heston
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Leonato Moderator
Joined: 23 Dec 2003 Posts: 319 Location: Nashville TN, USA
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Posted: Fri Jul 02, 2004 7:25 pm Post subject: |
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Concolor wrote: | I was privileged to be one of his proofreaders. No spoilers here, but mucho kudos for tying a number of ends together so they turn out nice and neat. You'll all like this one. |
I can only -third- this motion. Mr. Cateagle, you are doing most well with this, I too have pre-read it, and -cant wait- to get the final in my paws so I can record it. You furs can look forward to the recording being released as soon as possible after the textual release. Its very good Cateagle, and dare I say, your selling yourself short! ::grins:: Anyways, keep on keepin on!
PF's resident Lynx/Domestic reader,
Leonato _________________ My Fury Code:
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Sat Jul 03, 2004 2:51 pm Post subject: |
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Styx wrote: | I hope it's not as emotionally loaded as Tabitha Ch: 6 to be honest I still haven't read the other tab ch6 stories. Not because I don't think there're well written quite the opposite, given how well the authors have done with their other stories I'm worried that they will have the same effect that ch6 did on me. Chapter 6 didn't just make me sad you understand....it destroyed me I was so depressed I couldn't read the rest for a week. This disturbed me, I have read the other stories and have watched movies that were....moving I guess best describes the feeling but JEEZ the loss I felt after ch6 had me wondering if I could take the others and I haven't been able to get up the nerve to read them. |
Styx, mine's not that emotionally loaded at all. It's decidedly calmer and has warmth and humor mixed in. I've managed to mix in a few other things, too, but finding those particular tidbits (snerks and allusions) are left as an exercise for the reader.
The story is finished, ending on a positive note, and in the hands of Mike and Mwalimu.
Leonato, I think you'll find that the final version is generally cleaned up and tightened up and brings things to a good close. I did have to go back and tweak certain portions to make sure continuity was preserved with The Final Farewell and the other already published stories, but that was a simple matter to fix. There remains some items to be coordinated with Mwalimu, but I've already got those covered cleanly. I cover what's necessary for my story while allowing Mwalimu as much space as he needs for his story.
This collaborative effort has been enjoyable but I'll be glad to get back to the other stories currently in work (for the record, those are the next installment of From The Wings, the full basis for the Mach Angels story-verse (IR whenever you can scan that item, it'd be most useful - I'm sure you did your usual excellent job with it), and a new story (Tygon, it's the one we discussed after MFM last year, I'm finally getting back to it) which will be something of a departure for me. There's one other in work, I was chatting with an artist doing a commission and our collective muses hit us over the head with a story idea - though it isn't suitable for Mike's Bookshelf, I hope Kinsfire gets KAB back up and running because it'd go nicely there). _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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mwalimu Registered User
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Posted: Sun Jul 04, 2004 4:33 pm Post subject: |
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Just so you know, I'll be reviewing it and getting back to you today or more likely tomorrow. And I'm finally getting myself back up to do more writing after a few months of mostly downtime. I think I have some interesting things coming in my piece. _________________ mwalimu
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Sun Jul 04, 2004 8:33 pm Post subject: |
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mwalimu wrote: | Just so you know, I'll be reviewing it and getting back to you today or more likely tomorrow. And I'm finally getting myself back up to do more writing after a few months of mostly downtime. I think I have some interesting things coming in my piece. |
Cool, I think you'll like the way things turned out and I'll be interested in your choice on the main option, though either way makes for a clean story (honestly, there was a conscious decision to write so as to minimize the differences). Mike's found a couple things to fix and made a suggestion as to an easier and cleaner way to do something. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Tommy Fox Stone Post Master
Joined: 02 May 2003 Posts: 8694 Location: Angier North Carolina.
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Posted: Mon Jul 05, 2004 5:47 am Post subject: |
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It's good too hear that the story is coming along, I'm looking forward too reading it Cateagle... _________________ Due Too Budget Cuts The Light At The End Of The Tunnel Has Been Turned Off.
Doctor Of PF
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Wed Jul 07, 2004 3:39 am Post subject: |
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Getting down to the final lap before going out for final check to the writer's group. I've had lots of help and everyfur who's helped has made it a better story. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Sun Jul 11, 2004 9:19 pm Post subject: |
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Okay, the final draft of the story went out to the "Variations" writers group for review and comment.
I'd like to thank Mwalimu for his efforts, despite a lot going on, to coordinate my story with his; it does contribute to the overall tapestry of these stories. I'd also like to take a moment to thank Mike for his editting and inspirations and both Kinsfire and Concolor for very useful reading and commenting on various in-work drafts as I worked through this.
Unless someone finds a major "oops" on my part, this will go to Chris next weekend for posting when he gets the chance.
Cheers,
Cateagle
PS. Mike's posting on the Bookshelf will take place per his schedule and a week after that, I'll put it up on my site, along with a parallel version with one critical difference as an example of the flexibility a writer needs. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Mon Jul 12, 2004 5:41 pm Post subject: A QUICK NOTE |
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I've already received some feedback that was quite positive. *G* This is encouraging. Everything else remains on track for the final delivery to Chris and Mike. Though, if no changes are needed, they'll have it even sooner.
Now to return to my regularly scheduled efforts on installment 4.4 of From The Wings and a new story that's been in work for roughly a year now. The latter one is something of a distinct departure from my normal genre, but I think it'll be interesting reading. As a change of pace for those, I will also be detailing my Mach Angels story-verse, a sampe of which used to be on this forum. Is there any interest in my re-posting an updated version of this segment to the Writers Guild forum?
Cheers,
Cateagle _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
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