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Sharc_Vulpus
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 04, 2004 12:09 pm    Post subject: New song Reply with quote

WEll what I have so far... pain angst and sarrow make a good combonation to writing.

SO yeah it's a crappy sad song deal...

The sun shines it's brightest when your here
Then rains like hell when your gone
Something you couldn't ignore
In me something was wrong

Because you left me...
All alone..
You left me...
Broken heart in my home
You left me
Life is just not fair
You left me
You didn't even care...

The day it feels much colder now
Even though the sun it is out
My soul feels dead, there is no life left
My will to live is just not about

Cause you left me...
Now it's to late
You left me...
with this growing rage and hate
You left me
Life is just not fair
You left me
anbd didn't even care...

that's all I got right now

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PostPosted: Fri Nov 05, 2004 9:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

That's pretty cool, Sharc. I like it. Hopefully you'll start to feel better soon...

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 15, 2004 2:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

They'd make pretty good lyrics for a Linken Park song ya know...
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 12:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah I changed up the lyrics though to something i like a little better less of a rhyme skeem as well. it's kinda weird and cetchy if you get the right beat to the chorus and verses.


The sun shines brightest when your here
But rains like hell when your gone
Everything so plain and clear
Something in me was wrong

Cuase you, left me
All alone and afraid
You left me
I just couldn't change
Enough for you
I've tried and tried
But all you've left is pain

Just what was wrong with me?
Why couldn't you jsut tell?
Silence hurts the most you see
Why couldn't you just yell?

Right and back to the Chorus

(next verse is na maybe I have another verse I'm thinking about in it's place)
Sometimes we tell lies
that we didn't know they were
Heaven fading from my eyes
Like kicking in the sides with spurs

(other verse possiblity)
Emotions swirl like ciggerete smoke
they twist and wisp in the wind
The heart in my chest is broke
Impulses just won't send

then back to the chorus on to an intermental bridge and then the chorus once more and finish

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 1:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sharc_Vulpus wrote:
Yeah I changed up the lyrics though to something i like a little better less of a rhyme skeem as well. it's kinda weird and cetchy if you get the right beat to the chorus and verses.


The sun shines brightest when your here
But rains like hell when your gone
Everything so plain and clear
Something in me was wrong

Cuase you, left me
All alone and afraid
You left me
I just couldn't change
Enough for you
I've tried and tried
But all you've left is pain

Just what was wrong with me?
Why couldn't you jsut tell?
Silence hurts the most you see
Why couldn't you just yell?

Right and back to the Chorus

(next verse is na maybe I have another verse I'm thinking about in it's place)
Sometimes we tell lies
that we didn't know they were
Heaven fading from my eyes
Like kicking in the sides with spurs

(other verse possiblity)
Emotions swirl like ciggerete smoke
they twist and wisp in the wind
The heart in my chest is broke
Impulses just won't send

then back to the chorus on to an intermental bridge

(now that one verse taht doesn't fit into the rhyme sceem at all or the beat it's the off beat one)

How could i see
how could i have known
How could i let you do this to me
My love was pure
my love was strong
My love was yours alone

(big drum beat right before this) then the chorus once more and finish

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