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ChrisFoxx Site Owner
Joined: 19 Mar 2001 Posts: 1056 Location: Eau Claire, PA USA
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Posted: Sun Aug 15, 2004 8:56 pm Post subject: Chapter 13 |
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Ladies and/or gentlefurs, Chapter 13 has been sent to the proofreaders!
Sadly, like Chapter 12, James' talent will not appear. His work schedule has not allowed him to add to, so like Chapter 12, this one will suffer from it a bit.
Meanwhile, it's off to Eric later this week, then will be posted for your reading pleasure!
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mwalimu Registered User
Joined: 08 Nov 2002 Posts: 782 Location: Normal, IL
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2004 3:49 pm Post subject: |
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It's up!
...and there was much rejoicing _________________ mwalimu
My webpage -*-*- My LiveJournal
Badgers and mushrooms and snakes, oh my! |
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taspacecampjh Moderator
Joined: 28 Feb 2003 Posts: 529 Location: Abilene, Texas
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2004 5:43 pm Post subject: |
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*kisses Chris*
*twitch*
Its good to have PF back and the new chapter*
*Bounds off wearing a broken strait jacket and dragging 2 tones in chains and balls*
Weeeeeeeeeee *twitch* weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee _________________
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Tygon Site Owner
Joined: 03 Apr 2001 Posts: 2497 Location: Isernhagen, Lowersaxony, Germany
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Posted: Tue Sep 07, 2004 6:47 pm Post subject: |
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Oh, that is goining to be interesting...
Great writing, Chris. _________________ Tygon Panthera - name and species
www.planetfurry.com/~tygon/ |
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Hortmage Registered User
Joined: 28 Oct 2001 Posts: 243 Location: Midwest
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 12:04 am Post subject: |
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Hoo-yah! Planetfurry back up, and a new chapter from Chris!!!
So many tangles and sadnesses have been cleared up...and yet so many new tangles are forming...
....Eehhhxcellent.... _________________ Hortmage, the Magic Gardener
Making environmental education fun and MAGICAL! |
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racky raccoon Registered User
Joined: 24 Mar 2004 Posts: 619 Location: MASH H.Q. (Essex) England
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 6:35 am Post subject: |
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(page 129 of the PF Bible/Chronicles) The Great Fox Bard held up the tablet for which he has writen the new works for his 2nd masterpeace hence forth known has the new tesiment (to sabrina).
he spack he spack aloud "Lo, i have written it, chapter 13!! tremble in its glory" and the gatherd masses fell to their knees in praise of him, after there was much rejoicing and happeness as the light was coming back to the faithfull.
(I REALLY REALLY NEED A HUG)
Be seing you _________________ A Pro From Dover.
Crash Survivor 08/04
He who seeks knowledge is never a fool.
-Mike Regan-
I want a Lawyer, a Doctor... A CHEESE SANDWICH
-Harley Quinn-
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taspacecampjh Moderator
Joined: 28 Feb 2003 Posts: 529 Location: Abilene, Texas
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 12:34 pm Post subject: |
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*hugs racky raccoon with a strait jacket*
sounds like your not quite ready to come outa the jacket eather _________________
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Henry_Hound Registered User
Joined: 15 Apr 2004 Posts: 792 Location: Somewhereville, MO
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 12:47 pm Post subject: |
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taspacecampjh wrote: | *hugs racky raccoon with a strait jacket*
sounds like your not quite ready to come outa the jacket eather |
Who here ever is ready to come out of the straight jacket? Well except for me cause I'm Nepolean Bonipart Ruler of the Universe and any and all parralel dimensions. _________________ I'm a serial killer, it's a bad habbit.
I killed tony, lucky charms, and the silly rabbit. |
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taspacecampjh Moderator
Joined: 28 Feb 2003 Posts: 529 Location: Abilene, Texas
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 6:48 pm Post subject: |
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Henry_Hound wrote: | taspacecampjh wrote: | *hugs racky raccoon with a strait jacket*
sounds like your not quite ready to come outa the jacket eather |
Who here ever is ready to come out of the straight jacket? Well except for me cause I'm Nepolean Bonipart Ruler of the Universe and any and all parralel dimensions. |
Ok so I put you down for the super deluxe strait jacket with the automated nurale shocker addon kit _________________
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Styx Site Owner
Joined: 25 Dec 2002 Posts: 3176 Location: West Covina, California
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Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2004 11:34 pm Post subject: |
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Great job on this one Chris I only have one problem with continuity. While looking through the obituary she asks if she marries the guy she seeing.
Quote: | Her eyes scanned the first two paragraphs before she lifted her head. “This says ‘Sabrina Foxx’.�
Oh ****, she doesn’t know yet!
Sabrina’s eyes skimmed along, narrowing as she read her own obituary. She looked up, eyes glistening, bewildered. “Are you … sure … this is me?�
Tabitha nodded.
She shifted to the next one, from the Columbus Dispatch, and skimmed it as well. “My last name isn’t Foxx.� Sabrina again faced her sister. “You’re telling me that I’m marrying the guy I’m dating now??�
Again, Tabitha nodded silently.
“But … but I’ve only known him a few months. We haven’t even … and you’re saying … this is saying I’m going to marry him?� |
Now assuming that Sabrina is meaning that she and Chris had never slept together then there is a discrepancy with the timeline in Tabitha and the one in SOtS. Tabitha meets up with her sister and brings her forward in time on the day from Sabrina's perspective she was laid off from her first web design job I had posted something in another thread in this forum that illustrates what I’m getting at.
Okay according to SOtS
Chapter 9: Chris & Sabrina make love for the first time
Chapter 11: Sabrina tells Chris she's been placed "on an unpaid infinite vacation" from her first web design job.
Chapter 17: Sabrina tells Chris about her new job at the studio.
Anyway not that it’s a major thing, it’s easily dismissed I kind of notice these things. _________________ "Political Correctness is tyranny with manners." Charlton Heston
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Cateagle Site Owner
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1004 Location: Ft. Worth, TX
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Posted: Thu Sep 09, 2004 12:04 am Post subject: |
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Nice chapter, Chris, with some interesting twistedness obviously on its way. Keep up the good work, m'friend. _________________ "But the wildest of all the wild animals was the Cateagle. He walked by himself and all places were alike to him."
-- With apologies to Rudyard Kipling |
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Henry_Hound Registered User
Joined: 15 Apr 2004 Posts: 792 Location: Somewhereville, MO
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Posted: Thu Sep 09, 2004 5:09 am Post subject: |
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taspacecampjh wrote: | Henry_Hound wrote: | taspacecampjh wrote: | *hugs racky raccoon with a strait jacket*
sounds like your not quite ready to come outa the jacket eather |
Who here ever is ready to come out of the straight jacket? Well except for me cause I'm Nepolean Bonipart Ruler of the Universe and any and all parralel dimensions. |
Ok so I put you down for the super deluxe strait jacket with the automated nurale shocker addon kit |
ALL RIGHT!!!!! I get the add on kit.
And great work on the chapte Chris. I can hardly wait for the next one. _________________ I'm a serial killer, it's a bad habbit.
I killed tony, lucky charms, and the silly rabbit. |
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brina1 Registered User
Joined: 11 Jun 2004 Posts: 1 Location: England, United Kingdom
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Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 12:41 am Post subject: |
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Great chapter Chris, seriously. One thing is sorta bugging me though. I can't help but but feel a little sorry for Wendy. I know it sounds crazy coming from me, but I almost hope the time lines split rather than altering and leaving such a nice vixen all alone...
-Sabrina Montires
The Real Sabrina online |
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Mapper Registered User
Joined: 21 Jun 2003 Posts: 892 Location: East coast somewhere
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Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 2:16 am Post subject: |
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Well whos to say that Sabby lived up to that point in time. She will most likey survive the car wreck and live longer now, something else down lifes road may happen. But knowing theres chance that she may still be killed in the car accident maybe she instills in him that he must go on with his life after she's gone.
This time thing really has my head spinning heheh. _________________
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Tigermark Site Owner
Joined: 18 Apr 2003 Posts: 855 Location: Hopkinsville, KY
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Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 4:46 am Post subject: |
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great one Chris. I like the interplay between the now-alive Richard and Tabitha. Nice twist there, but I wonder what changes will take place when Sabrina gets sent back? Hmmmmm. (Fan fic story idea begins to form between the tiger's fuzzy ears)
Tigermark (You were missed at MFM. Hope you can make it next year) _________________ Tiger, tiger, burning bright...
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