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taspacecampjh Moderator
Joined: 28 Feb 2003 Posts: 529 Location: Abilene, Texas
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 1:35 am Post subject: Act IV Chapter 2 |
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Great Chapter, Some of the timeing seams off thou.... another Cliffhanger.... great, all I can say with a cliffhanger like that dont take long posting the next chapter
As for the timeing... Im trying to place it in sync with ZZStudios version and its not fitting
I know that events from your story does not coencide with ZZStudios version when events come into effect but it seams too scrunched up story wise _________________
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Luxo Registered User
Joined: 19 Oct 2003 Posts: 216
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 1:39 am Post subject: |
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Hikaru stated that it will follow the ZZ Studios storyline, but that the story won't be totally bound to it. That's why the events may not coincide. |
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 9:46 am Post subject: |
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Remember that ZZ Studios hasn't taken more than a few months to progress since the time IC has started. IC on the other hand has moved forwards by a month.
Add in the divergence of Arden's entrance and all the other things, and the timeline won't EVER meet up.
Cheers. _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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Hazel Registered User
Joined: 06 Apr 2004 Posts: 9
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 10:04 am Post subject: |
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Hikaru in Chapter 2 wrote: | She let out another low growl as she let go of the pillow and rolled over on to her back with her arms and legs spread out. |
What is it with guys and having a woman laying spread-eagle on the bed?
*laughs*
Men _________________ Do I want some hot nuts? Ummmm.... No. I don't think so. |
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 11:07 am Post subject: |
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*bonks Hazel with a nerf bat* |
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Hortmage Registered User
Joined: 28 Oct 2001 Posts: 243 Location: Midwest
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 12:40 pm Post subject: |
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I was going to comment about Zig's normal choice of sleepware...
(Eyes the nerf bat in Hikaru's hands)
...but I think i'll keep my thoughts to myself... _________________ Hortmage, the Magic Gardener
Making environmental education fun and MAGICAL! |
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Xaqtly Registered User
Joined: 07 Mar 2003 Posts: 442 Location: Las Vegas
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 2:20 pm Post subject: |
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Well I thought it was a great chapter. All the interactions with James and Zig were very well done, it was almost like reading a chapter of ZZtS. I don't mean to come off like your personal cheering section every time you post a chapter, but I'm truly impressed. I think you're getting better, for what that's worth. The only thing I noticed that drew me out of the story a little bit was using "the skunk" to describe Zig a little too often. Like:
"James!" the skunk declared at the unexpected sight. "What are you doing here?"
You only used it 4 times but it was all within the same section of the chapter. On the other paw, that doesn't really seem that unreasonable so maybe it's just me. You know I'm not much of a critic, heh. But I did like this chapter very much, it had a nice cohesive feel to it and it served to move the story ahead nicely. _________________ Changed my name to Kantaro. |
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 2:55 pm Post subject: |
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Yah, well... I was just trying to break it up from being Zig said all the time... I really dislike "he said, she said" stuff, so that's why I didn't use it that much...
I'll keep that in mind. _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 6:42 pm Post subject: |
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Face it the bear is a closet sadist _________________ "Political Correctness is tyranny with manners." Charlton Heston
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 7:44 pm Post subject: |
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webkilla wrote: | WHEN ARE WE GONNA GET SHEILA UP AND RUNNING!? |
root@sheila:~# uptime
18:46:58 up 153 days, 11 min, 3 users, load average: 0.00, 0.00, 0.05
Excuse me? Sheila's doing just fine. I don't see why I should reset it. _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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Henry_Hound Registered User
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 10:28 pm Post subject: |
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Great chapter as usual Hikaru. I do hope Kahnsman will be meeting an untimely,,,, make that a very timely death very soon. _________________ I'm a serial killer, it's a bad habbit.
I killed tony, lucky charms, and the silly rabbit. |
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Sun May 16, 2004 10:57 pm Post subject: |
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Henry_Hound wrote: | Great chapter as usual Hikaru. I do hope Kahnsman will be meeting an untimely,,,, make that a very timely death very soon. |
Don't hold your breath. If I kill him off, who's going to stir up trouble?
Eventually he'll get his just diserts, but until then I need him to be the bad guy for a bit longer.
Then again, I just might kill him off in three or four chapters just to mess with your minds. *laughs*
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webkilla Registered User
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hikaru Administrator
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2004 12:35 pm Post subject: |
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webkilla wrote: | set(respons)poor_joke="haha..." |
Come on. You didn't seriously think I wouldn't name one of my machines Sheila did you? *laughs*
Non-authoritative answer:
Name: sheila.ic-stories.com
Address: 10.1.1.9
Cheers _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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