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mfwhite Site Owner
Joined: 21 Feb 2002 Posts: 327 Location: Big land mass north of the USA
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Posted: Tue Apr 30, 2002 9:19 pm Post subject: Sabrina Cubed |
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The prologue is up for the next story arc.. Our Heroines lives go on, without the companionship of one, she lies on the edge of forever and it just might take a miracle to save her.
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Kinsfire Site Owner
Joined: 01 Nov 2001 Posts: 380 Location: Roselle, NJ
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Posted: Mon Aug 26, 2002 2:57 pm Post subject: |
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I've just read Chapter 3 - very interesting!
I look forward to seeing how these two disparate storylines connect. (Since I doubt any of our lady-friends are an Organic of the necessary power...)
...and if that confused you, then you haven't read it. Go! Do it!
Kinsfire _________________ That which does not kill me probably hurt like a sonuvabitch. |
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Tygon Site Owner
Joined: 03 Apr 2001 Posts: 2497 Location: Isernhagen, Lowersaxony, Germany
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Posted: Mon Aug 26, 2002 3:09 pm Post subject: |
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I can only agree with Kinsfire. I think we can say that with this story ands this chapter Cheetaur has done it again.
Great work Cheets! Let's get into the details when the others have read it _________________ Tygon Panthera - name and species
www.planetfurry.com/~tygon/ |
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Kathmandu Site Owner
Joined: 26 May 2002 Posts: 48 Location: Texarkana, Arkansas
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Posted: Tue Aug 27, 2002 8:07 pm Post subject: Chapter 3 |
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Heh, you ain't seen nuthin' yet... Since I help edit the beast, I can safely say it gets even better. He is actually much farther along than Chapter 3 but he is doing a lot of rewrite. Be patient and enjoy the ride.
<music>"Me and my shadow..." </music>
Kathmandu
(Swallow, the sweetest, nicest monster...) _________________ Kathmandu
Sculptor, artist and writer.
Be sure to read my stories
http://www.cableone.net/kathmandu/ |
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mfwhite Site Owner
Joined: 21 Feb 2002 Posts: 327 Location: Big land mass north of the USA
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Posted: Tue Aug 27, 2002 10:24 pm Post subject: Blushing |
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Wow thanks guys.....chapter 3 took a lot of doing but i think its one of my better ones.....
Thanks for all the kind comments......
Every single one is appreciated.......helps me write the next one...
Which if you're a Heather fan.....it should delight....
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Kinsfire Site Owner
Joined: 01 Nov 2001 Posts: 380 Location: Roselle, NJ
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Posted: Wed Aug 28, 2002 7:25 am Post subject: Re: Blushing |
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mfwhite wrote: |
Wow thanks guys.....chapter 3 took a lot of doing but i think its one of my better ones.....
Thanks for all the kind comments......
Every single one is appreciated.......helps me write the next one...
Which if you're a Heather fan.....it should delight....
Cheetaur |
My only comment to this is - WOOHOO!
*ahem* - sorry about that...
Kinsfire _________________ That which does not kill me probably hurt like a sonuvabitch. |
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TVDAVE Site Owner
Joined: 11 Feb 2002 Posts: 238 Location: RIYADH, SAUDI ARABIA
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2002 8:47 am Post subject: |
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Ahhh the touch of an old love, spurs the soul on , I wanna go live in cloud city, it seams like a cool place to be, so will Afarin and Kira hook back up? would be nice, and of course the hatchling making its presents known at the end of the chapter, yep nothing but the feel of warm puke in the morning, its gotta be love, hehehehe
good stuff Cheetaur, I had a good lunch with this but will the hatchling be ok? _________________ Reporting live and transcribed from the
Saudi Desert this is TVDAVE reporting |
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Bearion Registered User
Joined: 01 Jun 2002 Posts: 278 Location: Bay Area, California
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2002 11:34 am Post subject: Master Weaver? |
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mfwhite wrote: | Wow thanks guys.....chapter 3 took a lot of doing but i think its one of my better ones.....
Thanks for all the kind comments......
Every single one is appreciated.......helps me write the next one... |
This is one of the most dissimilar story threads I have ever read. I am MOST curious on how you will weave these into a cohesive tapestry.
I like! Please continue!
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mfwhite Site Owner
Joined: 21 Feb 2002 Posts: 327 Location: Big land mass north of the USA
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Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2002 11:13 pm Post subject: Chapter 3 |
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Hey Guys TV Dave, Bearion,
Thanks for the cool comments, its those letters that keep me writing
As to meshing the two stories, well its all in my head at the moment but i hope it will meld as well as i think it will......i hope....lets cross our fingers and pray huh....
As for Kira and Afain.....stay tuned.....they have a lot to catch up on.
Seems they, pinned for each other, not knowing how each other felt down deep.
Cheetaur _________________ Check out the new and improved Sabrina to the fourth power
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Tygon Site Owner
Joined: 03 Apr 2001 Posts: 2497 Location: Isernhagen, Lowersaxony, Germany
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Posted: Sat Aug 31, 2002 3:39 pm Post subject: |
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Well, my favorite part of this chapter is the first one. Mostly because it features Swallow
I hope to see her again soon.
Of course, the rest os great too. The Zargozians are a facinating society. I really hope Afain is well.
Of course, the main question still is: How the heck are these 2 plots going to connect. I'm pretty sure they will and I know that Cheetaur will be able to do that but I have abolutely NO idea how he's gonna do that _________________ Tygon Panthera - name and species
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anthony Site Owner
Joined: 12 Nov 2001 Posts: 1304 Location: Norway
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Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2002 8:16 am Post subject: |
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And a nice one it is...
But... tell me; are girl-talks always that... explicit?
Looking forward to the next chapter... _________________ "My name's Lion, Anthony Lion"
A fur with a license to purr...
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Why not surf over to www.micecomics.com and tell Mary what a stellar job she did... |
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mfwhite Site Owner
Joined: 21 Feb 2002 Posts: 327 Location: Big land mass north of the USA
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Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2002 9:38 am Post subject: Thanks Anthony |
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I dunno about all conversations but this one really got me interested in hearing more of them......
Sorry the chapter wasn't all that exciting........
Oh well you can rise up out of your chair next chapter to boo and hiss .......you know who returns.......
Oops said too much already......<sneaks away>
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Kinsfire Site Owner
Joined: 01 Nov 2001 Posts: 380 Location: Roselle, NJ
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Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2002 10:24 am Post subject: |
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I have been around girls who trusted me enough to have girl talks while I was in the room. The answer to your question, Anthony, is yes.
Heinlein got it right when he said that most men would faint if he heard the way women talk to each other.
Kinsfire _________________ That which does not kill me probably hurt like a sonuvabitch. |
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Fishburne Administrator
Joined: 23 Jul 2002 Posts: 596 Location: Plano, Texas
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Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2002 1:50 pm Post subject: WOOT! |
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Now thats-a SPICY Meat-a-ball!
Killer chapter. VERY nicely done with the workout suggestions.
WOOT! _________________ "Do not Taunt Happy Fun God" -Cthulhu |
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mfwhite Site Owner
Joined: 21 Feb 2002 Posts: 327 Location: Big land mass north of the USA
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Posted: Tue Sep 17, 2002 2:04 pm Post subject: It all in the.... |
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Hey Fishburne,
Thanks for the comments........sometime i get so down on myself that nothing i write well seems.........ah right.....
The part you describe was done with some clever editing by Evan Mayerle and Mike Regan........actually from all the comments it seems to have gone over way better than what i had originally had done......so hats off to them.
I know the whole chapter wasn't the most thrilling but it did move the plot along.........
Poor Charley.......he trying to save himself if he can......seems like his family is willing to give him that chance..........learning to stop hating is a difficult part of life sometimes.......
Cheetaur _________________ Check out the new and improved Sabrina to the fourth power
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