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Kayngi
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 05, 2009 9:46 pm    Post subject: Prose Experiment Reply with quote

I call this "Infiltrated." Curious to know what you think.

My armor is thick and hard.
My wall is tall and wide.
My barrier is impenetrable.

For long have I held them at arm's length.
Of course I enjoy companionship with them.
Even friendship.
But not more.
No, not more.

Most are not right.
Others are transient.
They are not worth it.
To preserve myself I built this protection.

I don my armor.
I've built my wall.
My barriers are raised.

But wait!
What's this?
Something's not right.
Testing, questing, probing.
What is different?

There!
How can this be?
My defenses are down?
A chink in my armor.
A crack, a hole in my wall.
A breach in my barrier.

How did this occur?
I did not allow this to happen.
To willingly allow them this close,
Is to risk pain.
Why would I allow such?

I would not allow such!
Yet it is done.
There is something here.
I try to shore up my defenses.
Repair my armor, my wall.
But the damage is done.

What to do?
How did this happen?
It must be him.
But how did he do this?
How could he accomplish what others have failed?
I did not allow this.

Wait!
I think I remember.
He said...something.
Different from the others.
We talked.
I stated my concern, my ultimatum.
He said, "I already knew."

A crack in my wall.
A chink in my armor.
A breach in my barrier.
My defenses are down.

I don't know how I feel about this.
How to oust him.
Do I want to oust him?

I feel...unprotected.
Vulnerable.
Yet...and yet...
My thoughts dwell on him.
I anticipate.
I thrill.

Perhaps...I'll try this.
I'll see this through.
Perhaps...he is worth it.
Time will tell.
Perhaps...I will allow this.
For now.

For still I have my defenses.
Breached they may be,
But down completely they are not.
I still have some semblance.
Will they come crashing down?
Can he accomplish this?
Can he infiltrate further?
Time will tell.
So I wait.
I anticipate.
I thrill.

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Asalis
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 05, 2009 10:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very nice poem. Paints a pretty good picture of a woman caught with their guard down.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 06, 2009 2:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting--you explore the carefully, desperately guarded fear that many of us have of letting others get into our innermost feelings and thoughts. It's scary that someone can get in, and somehow it surprises us when they do.

On the other hand, it is my opinion that the greatest joys in life cannot be experienced unless we allow ourselves that vulnerability.

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