Planetfurry BBS

[Cateagle]

I'm not goign to give away much on this one, yet, but I thought I'd post the first paragraph for comments:

Standing in the bow of the longship as it skated over the deep waters of the North Atlantic, Leif Jonsson strained every feline sense to catch the first hints of the land ahead; the land he'd signed on to fight for. At the same time, his tail twitched as he mused, This sure wasn't what I expected when I left home; but then second sons don't have a lot of choices, especially in a little town at the end of a far northern fjord. The forest cat looked back at his belongings as his thoughts continued, Still, I can't say my father skimped on me; that axe was not cheap, even if he did the smithy work himself. Shrugging his shoulders to settle his tunic, one paw dropped to the bone-handled knife in his belt as he chuckled to himself, Not that he didn't teach me, either. It helped a lot getting this friend and that sword. Bracing himself, he let his mind drift back to the day he'd earned the sword.

[hikaru]

Not a bad opening. Only comment is that if you're in the bow, then you're below decks. It sounds like he's standing on the bow of the ship.

Be interesting to see more.

Cheers

[Cateagle]