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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 4:03 pm Post subject: Chapter 33... |
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I just got done posting chapter 33. It's up. I'm not real happy with it, but it does move along a sub plot that I've been needing to get kicked around a bit. It also shakes Sheila up a tad which has been coming too.
Hope you enjoy it. I await your comments. _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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Xaqtly Registered User
Joined: 07 Mar 2003 Posts: 442 Location: Las Vegas
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 6:48 pm Post subject: |
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Great chapter. A nice break from the craziness of late and a chance to talk to each other about the important stuff. I had actually thought Luci removing the spells from Sheila would have made her a bit nicer towards Arden, but apparently not. Of course this is Lucifer we're talking about, so who knows what he did to her.
That bit at the end was interesting too. The whole time so far Arden has been telling Sheila she will be going home... now it looks like that's not set in stone after all. I can't wait to see what happens with that. _________________ Changed my name to Kantaro. |
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 6:54 pm Post subject: |
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*sighs* It seems to me that Arden isnt doing much to endure himself to Shiela either. She at least had a reason to treat him like he was the devil. He was acting as their puppet so to speak, even if he did screw the deal. Those kids are still just as dead.
I dont know. I dont think I could love someone who calmly talks about killing people and has the stories and skills to prove he has done them in the past. That is either going to be something she'll need to get over and he's going to have to stop acting like a cold blooded killer for her to do it. |
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Fishburne Administrator
Joined: 23 Jul 2002 Posts: 596 Location: Plano, Texas
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 7:33 pm Post subject: |
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interesting...
Lakash is a bastard, but then we knew that all along, right?
This is going to be an interesting one. _________________ "Do not Taunt Happy Fun God" -Cthulhu |
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hikaru Administrator
Joined: 20 Nov 2000 Posts: 1581 Location: Kansas City, KS, USA
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 7:51 pm Post subject: |
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Xaqtly wrote: | That bit at the end was interesting too. The whole time so far Arden has been telling Sheila she will be going home... now it looks like that's not set in stone after all. I can't wait to see what happens with that. |
Actually, Arden's been telling her that she'll get home no matter what happens. What is in question now is if he'll return with her. _________________ Read my comic: http://www.ImperialGelf.com
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Pat The Fox Moderator
Joined: 06 Jun 2002 Posts: 734 Location: Great White North
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 11:42 pm Post subject: |
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And allusion to the end draws near, the future unclear, will arden dissapear or will Shelia keep him near?
I love rhyming _________________ Pat The Fox
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Xaqtly Registered User
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2003 11:56 pm Post subject: |
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Hikaru wrote: | Actually, Arden's been telling her that she'll get home no matter what happens. What is in question now is if he'll return with her. |
Whoa, looks like I goofed. I misread one of the lines in that last passage, changing the meaning. Sorry about that, I normally don't misread stuff like that. I read this line:
"Then per our agreement, I'll not return to her world."
as:
"Then per our agreement, I'll not return her to her world."
D'oh. *smack* _________________ Changed my name to Kantaro. |
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Styx Site Owner
Joined: 25 Dec 2002 Posts: 3176 Location: West Covina, California
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Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2003 12:49 am Post subject: |
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Chapter 33 wrote: | Again, the dragon laughed. "Indeed." He leaned towards the image and grinned, but it held no humor, only threat. "You better hope that they don't discover the truth about you and your imminent demise, or I will own you." |
now this is odd I thought the whole point of this quest was renew Nanuk this would lead me to believe that instead the wish will kill her if he knows this I do not think Arden will want to make the wish jeopardizing everything it seems that our boy is likely to be in need of a padded room when all is said and done. _________________ "Political Correctness is tyranny with manners." Charlton Heston
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Bearion Registered User
Joined: 01 Jun 2002 Posts: 278 Location: Bay Area, California
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Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2003 1:34 am Post subject: |
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Xaqtly wrote: | Hikaru wrote: | Actually, Arden's been telling her that she'll get home no matter what happens. What is in question now is if he'll return with her. |
Whoa, looks like I goofed. I misread one of the lines in that last passage, changing the meaning. Sorry about that, I normally don't misread stuff like that. I read this line:
"Then per our agreement, I'll not return to her world."
as:
"Then per our agreement, I'll not return her to her world."
D'oh. *smack* |
Ya know, I did Exactly the same thing!
D'oh. *smack*, indeed!
Great chapter. So it seems the whole of creation boils down to one womans decision, and her being truthful. Arden holds the cards, but he'll be listening to her. |
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Joined: 06 Sep 2002 Posts: 1368 Location: Vienna, Austria
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Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2003 1:48 am Post subject: |
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Well, Arden isn't exactly making it easy for Sheila to like him... _________________ I'm a nut, but there are those who appreciate me for it. |
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Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2003 3:21 pm Post subject: |
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Since the Amulet of Lakash has a curse upon it perhaps the Lamp of Lakash does too
Arden may not be trying to get Shiela to like him more incase he doesnt get to go back with her,he might feel it would be easier on her.
Also if you remember dragons are cold and calculating arden seemed to be pretty affected when he talked about killing a guy at the appartment complex he used to live at.
Also i misread that exact same sentence |
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Posted: Thu Apr 17, 2003 3:37 pm Post subject: |
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i wasnt logged in |
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