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[Virmir]

Here's the next installment in this series:

"Smiles"

A short one this time. Hope you enjoy!

[Syrius]

Woot. I liked it. To be honest, the beginning didn't draw me in, but after the wizard left the room, that's when I got interested. (Maybe because it reminds me of Harry Pothead, and I HAET it.) I like the character's non-belief in the deities of that world, hoping to see he later manages to conciliate both belief and fact later on. (which I must tell you, it's something I wanted to incorporate in my Shadows main character as well.) Trivia: "Eli" is one of the names of God in Hebrew.

The bit with the magic marionette was nice, as was his opening up to the kid for a moment, and your description of the mountains. I wish my descriptions were as rich and colorful as yours.

The vixen's doubts and exploring the full-animal form were very good. That's what drew me in the most. How she wonders what it would be like to give into instinct and primal state. (There is a small typo in that line in your story, I think you missed a "be".) Yet, she feels worried or afraid of fully losing whatever's left of human in her morphic appearance when she wakes up. I call that the jewel of the story. Well done.

[Virmir]

Ha ha, I've never read Harry Potter, so I doubt much of what I will be writing in the future would be resembling it.

If you read other MK stories, you'll notice that most characters are very religious. I can only recall on other non-believer out of the hundreds of characters created, and he never had issues with it. This was one of the inspirations for making Virmir a staunch non-believer, and it will be a vital point in coming stories.

Thanks for the comments! The final scene was my favorite to write as well. Simple animal-hood enchants me, so I write about it a lot.

[Virmir]

Hey folks,

Another short one here:

"Awareness"

This one's a break in the action, as it's set several hundred years in the past. It's also sort of stands by itself.

Hope you enjoy!

[Virmir]

Oops... been neglecting these forums for too long. Need to get back on it!

Here's the latest installment of my MK saga:

"Following"

Hope you enjoy!